My biggest "beef" and turnoff about reading and subsequently believing Christopher Story, is the childish way he describes the "Bad Guys".

As a qualified reporter, investigator, writer, etc. you don't enhance your reputation by using "gutter" language, unless you are writing fiction or, god forbid, pornography.

My advice to CS; "Clean up your descriptive skills and this will go a long way in growing your believable audience".

Good Luck to all!